Deviant Login Shop  Join deviantART for FREE Take the Tour
×

:icondthdespair: More from dthdespair


More from deviantART



Details

Submitted on
April 17, 2004
File Size
1.7 KB
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
1,882
Favourites
26 (who?)
Comments
30
Downloads
69
×
Insomnia
  Is my lie
  That I use daily
  Like makeup
  To cover my sadness

Sadness
  Is my being
  That makes up what's left
  Of this lonesome shell
  That encases death

Death
  Is a release
  That shatters reality
  Freeing all of those
  Who no longer feel love

Love
  Is just a game
  That always ends trajicly
  Tearing apart the souls
  Of those intertwined by fate

Fate
  Is something fake
  That's used as an excuse
  For leaving someone close
  When they need your support

Support
  Is waht I thought I had
  That feeling of having a friend
  Without them I am nothing
  I'll never learn to mend

Mend
  Is what I need to do
  That lack of self esteem
  I need to find a way to stop
  To take away the painful dream

Dream
  Is what I do at night
  That same repeating song
  I'm stuck thinkg of only you
  Although, I know I'm wrong

Wrong
  Is what you've done to me
  That feelings your body sends
  I can't go on forever
  So thus my story ends
Alone one night... started as just a couple of verses.. then i just flew with it.
Add a Comment:
 
:iconsynedyx:
Synedyx Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The ONE thing I see wrong with this WONDERFUL poem is this... It's Tragically, not how you spelled it. And correct the spelling of "what." I'm Grammar Hitler usually, so that distracted me from this beautiful poem.
Reply
:iconrikkiluvsgaara1:
RikkiluvsGaara1 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how everything connects :D This is really good (:
Reply
:iconbleedinglovejuice:
BleedingLoveJuice Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
this was really... good,, i get it, it's how feel, felt, feel... i like it alot because i can conect, good work
Reply
:iconuntainted-love:
UnTainted-Love Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2009  Student Writer
I love it,
You really got your feelings across
Reply
:iconartfreak331:
ArtFrEaK331 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
This.. it speaks so clearly to me now.

Will a heart ever mend once broken?
Reply
:iconjessa:
jessa Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2004   Writer
this is really good. insomnia drew me in and it just kept me the whole way through. you can totally tell it just poured outta you...i love those types of poems as well.
Reply
:icondthdespair:
dthdespair Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2004
Thanks for your comment. Yea, this one was close to me and always will be. ^^
Reply
:iconfallenstar:
fallenstar Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2004  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the way you wrote this a lot, it's great :) I especially liked Fate...
Reply
:icondthdespair:
dthdespair Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2004
Yea. This one... wow... I loved writing it. It all just kind of poured out and that's my favorite way to write.
Reply
:iconfallenstar:
fallenstar Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2004  Hobbyist General Artist
it's always nice when that happens isn't it?
Reply
Add a Comment: